Identify the phonetic flaws in excerpts from the works of novice authors whose manuscripts were edited by M

Identify the phonetic flaws in excerpts from the works of novice authors whose manuscripts were edited by M. Gorky. Compare your observations with Gorky’s remarks provided at the end of the exercise.

Gorky’s Comments:
1. Gorky emphasized the word «опрозраченном» and wrote, «You can find hundreds of these ‘как ка’ on the pages of Novikov’s boring book.»
2. The phrase where three «с» are unbearably whistling.
3. These phrases are hardly beautiful… Perhaps in poetry, they would call it alliteration, but in prose, it’s carelessness.
4. Here — «на-не-нно-на-на-но-ну-не-на» — is indistinct, and such constructions are not uncommon.
5. Sometimes the translator cares about musicality, and it turns into poetry: «Синие зимние тени ложились от сосен на снег. Не оглядываясь, медленно она шла по грязной улице. Но он сказал, закуривая трубку: ‘А не пора ли нам идти, мой друг?'»
6. The author doesn’t hear the giggling in their sentence, doesn’t notice the «мыло.»
7. There’s no need to pack so many hissing sounds into one sentence.
8. Gorky highlighted the syllables «ста,» «сты.»
9. Gorky highlighted the ending «лось» three times and wrote, «Poorly.»
10. Consonances «из,» «из» are highlighted, and for the first word, a synonym is suggested — «inogda.»
11. There’s a verb «шить.» So, «ушило,» «ушила» sounds awkward here.
12. The words «дозоры,» «горы» are highlighted, and a note is made: «In prose, avoid rhyming words, don’t put them together in one sentence.»
13. Consonances «бра,» «бра» are highlighted.
14. The words «град,» «гранат» are highlighted.